Monday, May 16, 2011

Favorite lines from 'Pack'

I'm back at it, working on the revisions to Pack based on my beta reader feedback.  So far, I'm really pleased with what everyone has said, and while there's still a ton of work to do (it seems never-ending) I think I'm at least on the right track.

But today, I thought it would be fun to share a few of my favorite lines from the story.  Enjoy!



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We kept up the pace for a couple hours, finally stopping for a break when my stomach growled so loudly that even Erik heard it.

"Hungry?" he asked.

"No, I think I'll wait to see if my stomach can eat my spine."

***

Teeth the size of paring knives glinted in a vicious snarl.

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"No," I said firmly, trying to imagine the wolves were just misbehaving Labradors.

***

I watched as the first of the haggard looking buildings passed my window.  Faded and peeling red paint graced its walls, while slightly crooked steps led up to the sagging front porch.  The windows were clean though, and well-dressed mannequins advertised modern clothing inside.  The next building was equally dilapidated, and the sign over the door simply read Bar.

***

"How's the training going?" Sarah asked, as I gracelessly threw myself into a chair.

"I'm definitely going to be sore tomorrow, probably sore tonight, and maybe even sore before lunch is over," I replied.

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3 comments:

  1. I liked the idea of posting a few lines, instead of asking new readers to commit to paragraphs and paragraphs! Brilliant! :)

    and "Teeth the size of paring knives glinted in a vicious snarl" is a scary line ;-)

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  2. And by the way I love your blog title :)

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  3. Hi Danielle! Thanks for the comment. I'm glad you liked the idea, though I really can't take credit for it. One of my favorite authors, Faith Hunter, posts snippets like this on her website sometimes. Anyway, I plan to post a few more as I continue to revise and move toward publication.

    I'm following you on Twitter now too, so let's keep in touch!

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